We
It’s raining …drop in drops… drop by drop.
Each drop like new born baby whining making sounds of me …me…me…
And then they reach the ground precipitated in the soil and shout …”We”
I carry you, you in me
The voices unknown enunciating we
Hindered, paused silhouette of I
Answering quintessential question of why
Mind is what, a monastery of child
Prayers so innocent, yet so wild
Phantom kites flies in fantasy
Flap its wings in rising ecstasy
Kept on each intermittent hair
Suspended silvery, dew drops that stare
Have lost in body a harrow
May be will find it sometime tomorrow
On crossroads of him, you, me and eyes
Enumerated scions full of vies
Is it real? Or is it a veil?
Plastic snow doesn’t melt yet gleam
A bit of you and a bit of me
The smell of soil and pouring ‘we’
Together ‘we’ are rather be
Hands having eyes that don’t see
It is a luminous cry on shadows of eternity
Or perhaps…perhaps an insane serendipity…
“Mind is what, a monastery of child
Prayers so innocent, yet so wild…”
lines i liked the best and the graphic is simply amazing…mind sharing where u got it from
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Uhmmm…i can easily say that this is one of ur best post.I and another I, but tofgether making the We…Individualistic…and den sacrificing their identities to become a bigger,stronger entity..sometimes which is real and sometimes an illusion..but still it is the WE that matters.
I AGREE i THINK THIS IS BY FAR ONE OF THE BEST POSTS i HAVE READ HERE!!!!! keep up the good work
Wow! you’ll probably get a lot of compliments on this one again little brother. The words and the picture…simply perfection. Hope you’re doing okay.
The primary underlying idea in the poem is great. The unification of I’s into we is well done too.
with your poems i always get such a blast of ideas in my head that i dont know what was ur line of thought when u wrote it..why u chose the words and imagery u did .
Maybe u’d care to explain?
GREAT POST HERE.
ME ,,ME,,,,,,,BECOMES WE….SIMPLY GREAT…
IMAGE IS ALSO VERY PERFECT…
GOOD AS ALWAYS…
**Hands having eyes that don’t see
I love wut u wrote there! Just brilliant!
Keshi.
firstly the image is gr8..
secondly the imagery is gr8..as well…
ME trans mutates into WE…
Gradually…but surely..
Surreal yet real..
Multiple yet unique…
at times they drape in care…
at times they rape in malice..
till despair, disgust, abomination!!
But they still remain…
and also ME the integral part of the WE..
cheers…surely one of ur best
Rashi: thanx rashi..well graphics..i guess got from flikr..thru blog of my friend Hidyn gems..actually i just save any pic i come across which is quite connecting to my thots..:) so have a good database..:)
Akansha: he he thanx mate..still a surface encounter
..but yet true..i and I make we..n yet they r so distributed
Kaylee: oh thanks so much dear..:)
Sophiagurl:thank u sis..well i will get back to u..
Phoenix: well why?..the intensity of life’s happenings is too much profound i guess..n i guess when this stops..the words will also stop..n so the imagery..
the idea of this will be like revealing alot about me..but epitome of this is how much divided is the self is..the more i dwell into it the more it gives the feeling of schizophrenic part…may times disintegrated and yet we move in single I.and about the explanation of poem is u say..then i guess this is not the place
Sweetgirl: good to c u back:) thanx
Keshi: thanx keshi so much
Sneha: thanx
wow! thats was great
to add
enervated rocks of jungle they turn
bigger the boulder larger they turn..
Contemplating self
loosing sight
fighting the “I”
wanting the “me” to survive
contemplating still…
the imagination is wild, the words are nearer still…amazing imagination.
Rain brings so many pleasure and memories with it…
And what a co-incidence its raining in delhi very hardly…..
and am enjoying seeing it…
beautfiful words and ya the pis is just great..
Take care
Sorry that was *pic….
mind blowing……easily one of the best creation of urs…:)
yup…i didnt open my dict for this:D….hehehe
awwwww it was so cute. more than anything the idea was sweet and sublime
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Its gatta be Eternity:)
U do try to beat urself withe evry piece..
( gat it..need to watch it though);)
yet another impressive example of blogger poetry! i should start writing poems too!
whoa! that was brilliant! great job..beautiful imagery.. it seems to weave an amazingly accurate n surreal picture.. n i love the idea behind the poem.. your blogger names so apt!
Pretty detailed blog you got here….i’ve always been kinda doubtful to switch to wordpress…i like the over all look of what you have here….and the picture is spooky…i mean what is a man doing inside another man’s mouth! ha ha…
good work man, i got your feed on, i’ll be back for reading!
N
A Story A Day
Definitely one of your best posts….loved it!
imagine if the i wouldnt exist
they why wouldnt exist…
thanks so much for the award…
i am completely unworthy…
but flattered…
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and dude that picture completely kills the poem…
oh God !! I am just so scared to see this foto n cant dare to see this page again hence havent read the post, please do write the next post soon so this post goes out of mysight
At my end, Nothing specific just being busy n bored of work n travel
Trying to regain the lost enthu soon..
Cheers !!
On crossroads of him, you, me and eyes
Enumerated scions full of vies
Is it real? Or is it a veil?
Plastic snow doesn’t melt yet gleam
love these lines…wonderful words, tho’ the pic cud make me puke
lolzz
schizophrenia?????????
no not quite that…..[a bit of you, a bit of me][sound of pouring we]
y do we have to complicate reality by calling it schizophrenic?
The smell of soil and pouring ‘we’
Together ‘we’ are rather be
Hands having eyes that don’t see
It is a luminous cry on shadows of eternity
Or perhaps…perhaps an insane serendipity…
amazing lines….i keep ocming back to read it….:)
if i get the OST of the bong connection will pass it on..
I think you left too much unsaid. The essence seethes like an incense. Heart burns………. Loved the ‘monastery’-bit.
Insane serendipity it indeed is when the divine epiphanies suddenly manifest themselves and then sit back and wonder whether WE = I or am I just another befuddled schizophrenic .
Shouting for attenttion..me, me, me then merging into a we! amazing lines….
Mind a monastory of a child…beautiful!!! Need i say anything more? Brilliant post.
i went through quite a lot of your posts.. this one’s my favorite. cute n awesome
hey nice! Lucid and holds attention till the end! Will visit again!
Ceruleus
i liked particulary this part : ” A bit of you and a bit of me
The smell of soil and pouring ‘we’
Together ‘we’ are rather be”
the picture is a bit weird but interesting for this great poem, I identify myself here.
Anupama
yeah wild but real:)
Shruti: thanx
but the poem ws not about rain ..it was jst metaphor and personification
Jattz: thanx bro..:)
Utopia: thanx a bunch
Aman: bro u flatter me..:) thanx alot..n do give ur feedback how was the movie
rajarshi: All the best bro
Pegasus: thanx aot..welcome to my world
Nothingman: thanx mate..thats an honour..btw trust me u wldn’t want to try wordpress..its got so much restriction..with the knowledge of CSS this place is waste…there are many restrictions here
Neo: Thanx:)
Pricky: u very well deserve that..n better put that thing in ur blog..have not seen it yet otherwise gonna kick u
Aadee: oops sorry ..dnt wry i have put another post above this ..it wont bother now:)
Lass: hey welcome mate..thanx..well about the pic..it does give a yuck feeling but it was kinda close to this..
Deepti: oh u r saying this…well we need not complicate..its already complicated..not by calling it that…inside it feels disintegrated…with every bit having voice of his own..has own emotions..
Raka: thanx so much..yeah please send it my mail id if u get the OST i will b soooooooo greatful to u
whatsinaname: u every well caught me..left lot of thing unsaid..sa its better that way..otherwise i wld have been jeopardizing the whole meaning of this..while writing this i felt m going some way other ..n then i jst put my pen on hold..
oracle: bull’s eye
..buddy do drop ur link..
Nikita: well thanx for saying so much..he he
Ankit: thanx so much mate:)
ceruleus : thanx
well if u comng back i mite b disapponiting for a while…anways when i come back will ping u for sure
Soul&body: ohhh thank u so much..it means alot
hey i loved this poem of yours…u must make a compilation soon and publish it
and yeah..that story that i wrote on my blog…its my first…i got inspired by people who have such amazing posts around here.. i donno if i can ask…but how can u realte to the story? dont answer if u dont wish too! n ya im adding u to my blogroll
wow!! love this one. imressive.
Great!
simply superb ! speechless to comment on this post the lines are as good as the pic gr8 combi